Journal #6- Authorial Distance or Psychic Distance

Sentences:

1. Jade walked down the most sunlit street in her area, hoping it would dry her ongoing tears.
2. Jade's head dropped, her rose filtered eyes, too appalled to look at the passersby.
3. Jade was too preoccupied by the visions of her slaughtered sister to notice the pavement in front of her.
4. How could he do this to her? My OWN uncle...she thought.
5. She continued to think about her hidden spot, in the closet, her safe zone, while her sister had to endure the pain that came with a forced man upon her.

Paragraph:

Jade walked down the most sunlit street in her area, hoping it would dry her ongoing tears. Her head dropped, her rose filtered eyes, too appalled to look at the passersby. Jade was too preoccupied by the visions of her slaughtered sister to notice the pavement in front of her. How could he do this to her? My OWN uncle…she thought. She continued to think about her hidden spot in the closet, her safe zone, while her sister had to endure the pain that came with a forced man upon her. Her body shriveled up like a raisin, as she stopped off at the corner garbage can to throw up the memory in an oatmeal-like slime.